Assignment #15- Final Reflection

I feel like i was able to achieve the goals that i had wanted to in the beginning of the class.  One of the goals that i would change would be my writing process i was able to change it and i am happy i did.  By improving on my writing process it will be very helpful with my future classes. I would like to keep working on how to step up my essay and have them be more focused on the thesis.  

Assignment #14- Planning for Revisions

For my portfolio I chose to revise my article analysis essay. The strengths of my third essay was that i had a really good personal respond and good ideas. The weaknesses were that my paper lacked focus and I did not have a good thesis. My conclusion was not the best.

I will revise my essay by going through and working on my focus of the paper around my thesis. I will need to look at all the paragraphs and see how they are related to the main idea. If the relationship is unclear or not organized, then  I need to revise that one paragraph. 

Assignment #11- Patterns of Error

In my writing, I tend to have a lot of run-on sentences.  I feel that I do not know when the end on my sentence comes because I am so focused on the ideas.  The only way that I feel like it can be changed is by learning when the idea is done or when it is a good time to end the sentence.
In my writing, I am always using the word because and that is so that i can feel like i am getting my points across.  I feel like i need to be able to use a different word chosen but i can only think of because.  The way it can be changed would be by looking the word up and find words that are the same meaning.
In my writing, the other thing i tend to do is not having a easy to read essay.  I am always all over the place with my ideas.  When i write i just tend to go with how my mind is thinking.  The way to help me with this would be by going though the process of re reading the essays. 

Assignment #13- Analyzing and Writing Arguments

I analyzed "Don't Presume to Know a Pig's Mind " In that essay, the writer used an sarcastic tone in order to grab the readers attentions. The tone is strong because it show people that he knows the topic so well that he can joke about it. This taught me that when picking a tone to make sure that it is something that can be trustworthy.  I know that when I read a type of essay I like it when the writer has a joke or two.  When the writer does the ending I felt like it was just an ending and was something that needed a bam at the end. I want my ending to have the pop and then end.  The other thing that I learned form the article was that have background information is that a need to have it can do without.

Assignment #12- Thinking Critically About Evidence

Most college students would benefit from moving out of their parents house in order to gain some independent and grow up.  By having a job students could gain the experience they will need for a career.  Moving out would require students to make their own money, but by staying at home they could save money.  Some parents have fights and argue a lot were can cause stress on some students and cause some problems their focus.

• I feel that the strongest evidence that I have would be stress levels because you you have parents who are arguing it gets hard to focus on the school work because the students would be worried about their parents relationship.  It is a very emotional and if a student was to decide to move out it would be because of problems at the house.
• The weakest type of evidence would be the feel of having to obtain a job because if a student gets a job they are able to get more of Independence but by doing so some students can lose focus because they are more worried about the bills and  food than worrying about their school work.

Assignment #10- Thinking Critically About Peer Review

I feel that doing a peer review is very helpful expect when we have people who are reviewing that do not understand how the essay is supposed to be reviewed.  When I try to review a paper I am confused to how reviewing works, but that is only because of my disability it is a little difficult for me to review essay.  In order for the peer review to improve what we need to do is have more than one person look at it.  We should have about three people in the class look over the essays. 

The weakest that I have is that I am unable to have problems with the grammar or the stature of the essay.  I can not find run-on or fragments.  I feel that the only strength that I have is understanding how to organize the essay and if there is more details that are needed.

What I feel would be a good peer review process would be if a person looks for the essay after I am done and is able to make sure that I do not have any types of problems with the grammar. The process would be a one on one try of thing but after one group looks at the essay we would move to a new group to form a new group and have someone else look at the essay.  I feel that if we have someone else we could get a new view for our essay.  When we have to redo the essay before we turn in the final we would do one more quick review then have the essay due on the next class. 

Assignment #9- A Helpful hint on Love

Why do we all try so hard to find someone that will love us? If you love yourself then you will be able to find the person that will love you for you. I have been able to find that person and he loves all the weirdness that I have to give to him. When I first met him I do not know that he would be the one I would want to be with forever, but here we are 3 years later and I am just high on life because I can just be myself without getting criticized about it. But not everyone is lucky the first time around.  

Sometimes you feel that you finally found that one person, but they surprise you by breaking up with you and tearing up your heart into in pieces and they do not even care about what they have done to you. Take a timeout and you look back on hoe you tried to give that person all your love you have, but they just throw it out the window. We are already chained to the fact of wanting to have the approval of the ones that you love.  Sometimes we have to leave in order to follow our dreams even if it might mean losing the one that you love, but if they love you they will be able to wait for you until you can come back to them. You have to remember that there is always going to be someone out there for you, there are a lot of fish in the sea, which is what a lot of people are always saying. If you just open your heart and show who you are yourself, you could be able to find the one that is for you, someone that will just love you.  If you are feeling that you will never find the right person then just do not look right now give your heart some time to reopen itself, and when you feel ready you will just know it by being able to feel it in your soul. So never give up on love and it will always find a way to you.