Assignment #15- Final Reflection

I feel like i was able to achieve the goals that i had wanted to in the beginning of the class.  One of the goals that i would change would be my writing process i was able to change it and i am happy i did.  By improving on my writing process it will be very helpful with my future classes. I would like to keep working on how to step up my essay and have them be more focused on the thesis.  

Assignment #14- Planning for Revisions

For my portfolio I chose to revise my article analysis essay. The strengths of my third essay was that i had a really good personal respond and good ideas. The weaknesses were that my paper lacked focus and I did not have a good thesis. My conclusion was not the best.

I will revise my essay by going through and working on my focus of the paper around my thesis. I will need to look at all the paragraphs and see how they are related to the main idea. If the relationship is unclear or not organized, then  I need to revise that one paragraph. 

Assignment #11- Patterns of Error

In my writing, I tend to have a lot of run-on sentences.  I feel that I do not know when the end on my sentence comes because I am so focused on the ideas.  The only way that I feel like it can be changed is by learning when the idea is done or when it is a good time to end the sentence.
In my writing, I am always using the word because and that is so that i can feel like i am getting my points across.  I feel like i need to be able to use a different word chosen but i can only think of because.  The way it can be changed would be by looking the word up and find words that are the same meaning.
In my writing, the other thing i tend to do is not having a easy to read essay.  I am always all over the place with my ideas.  When i write i just tend to go with how my mind is thinking.  The way to help me with this would be by going though the process of re reading the essays. 

Assignment #13- Analyzing and Writing Arguments

I analyzed "Don't Presume to Know a Pig's Mind " In that essay, the writer used an sarcastic tone in order to grab the readers attentions. The tone is strong because it show people that he knows the topic so well that he can joke about it. This taught me that when picking a tone to make sure that it is something that can be trustworthy.  I know that when I read a type of essay I like it when the writer has a joke or two.  When the writer does the ending I felt like it was just an ending and was something that needed a bam at the end. I want my ending to have the pop and then end.  The other thing that I learned form the article was that have background information is that a need to have it can do without.

Assignment #12- Thinking Critically About Evidence

Most college students would benefit from moving out of their parents house in order to gain some independent and grow up.  By having a job students could gain the experience they will need for a career.  Moving out would require students to make their own money, but by staying at home they could save money.  Some parents have fights and argue a lot were can cause stress on some students and cause some problems their focus.

• I feel that the strongest evidence that I have would be stress levels because you you have parents who are arguing it gets hard to focus on the school work because the students would be worried about their parents relationship.  It is a very emotional and if a student was to decide to move out it would be because of problems at the house.
• The weakest type of evidence would be the feel of having to obtain a job because if a student gets a job they are able to get more of Independence but by doing so some students can lose focus because they are more worried about the bills and  food than worrying about their school work.